The pie charts illustrates the number of sales in different spheres of online shopping in New Zealand during 10 years.
The pie charts
illustrates
the number of sales in different spheres of online shopping in New Zealand Change the verb form
illustrate
during
10 years.
Change preposition
over
Overall
, consumers in travel and clothes categories were
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apply
significant
decreased over Replace the word
significantly
period
. Add an article
the period
In contrast
, the popularity of books, films and music were
raised by the end of the period.
Looking at the details,the trade of film and music started from 21%,which has Correct subject-verb agreement
was
considerable
grown to 33% per year. Production of books reached a low point of 19% in 2003 and a peak of 22% in 2013.
Meanwhile, the most popular sector Replace the word
considerably
was travel
approximately 36% in 2003.Change the verb form
was traveled
was traveling
Following
this
it Add a comma
,this
has
dropped slightly to 29% by the end of Unnecessary verb
apply
period
. Add an article
the period
Similarly
, the consumption of clothes during 10 years declined dramatically from 24% in 2003 to 16% in 2013Submitted by Sonyak241205 on
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