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Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people are of the view that only those
species
 of
animals
 that are endangered must be safeguarded
while
 others have the opinion that we should preserve all
animals
 irrespective of their status. I agree with the latter part of the view and in the next few ,paragraphs I shall explain both perspectives with reasons. On the one hand, wild
animals
 like tigers and polar bears are on the verge of extinction because of severe poaching and
habitat
 erosion, which has led to the ecological imbalance of the wildlife environment.
Consequently
, more herbivore
animals
 will survive like sheep and cattle, as the carnivore
animals
 are rarely to find and feed them.
Therefore
, conservationists are of the perception that endangered
species
 are more vulnerable to disappearance and circumstances of their
habitat
 are
seen
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becoming a less common sight. To epitomize,
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According to
 International Union for Conservation of Nature (IUCN) Red List lists many
species
 like the Siberian tiger, polar bear and giant panda as
like
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 to disappear from the face of the earth.
Hence
, these
animals
 should be protected by making strict laws on poaching and
also
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habitat
 loss
of
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them
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should be
rebuilt
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. On the other hand, if only a few
animals
 are preserved
then
 there is a high possibility that others may at the verge of suffering from harmful circumstances like climate change and
habitat
 loss.
Hence
,
this
 may lead to the deaths of other
animals
.
Therefore
, it is vital that we protect all
animals
 irrespective of
their
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 numbers available because all
animals
 deserve to survive in a convenient way.
Therefore
, I conclude that despite a few
animals
are
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suffering huge and are on the verge of vanishing because of human greed of poaching and environmental pollution,
conversationist
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conversationists
 often
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 that all
animals
 should be safeguarded because only a few selected
species
 are looked
upon
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remaining left look will cause them to survive other will die
hence
 lead to ecological imbalance.
Therefore
, all
animals
 should be protected.
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