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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technology has boosted societies development
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 all aspects, especially transports, which experienced the period of riding horses, taking steam trains and flying flights. And the
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 will be achieved someday, which contributes to citizens
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 for driving and
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 anywhere as a passenger.
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, I strongly support
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 will be impacted by
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 in many beneficial aspects.
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vehicles will influence
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modern life and why there are many advantages. On the one hand, more advanced auto-navigation will be applied
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 vehicle machines so that can be automatically operated to help keep people's security in case events of emergency
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, rather than
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 by people who never can predict where or when
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 potential
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, a driver who should
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 noticed that if the bend had other cars, while he was feeling sleepy, which not only can trigger
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 but can even cause somebody's death, even if their vehicles had navigation.
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, the more
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 pay more attention to coin
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 technology, the faster revolution of society foot-printed will be as if it
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, robots
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, it
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. From my perspective, even if
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 still are some wealthy arguments about the risk of
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, modern
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 will solve it in the future.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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