all over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. this problem affects both children and adults. what are the reasons for this rise inn obesity? how could it be tackled?

Over the
last
few
years
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it has become more common for
people
to become overweight. Many children
as well as adults
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, as well as adults,
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consider eating unhealthy junk
food
instead
of cooking a meal at home. The
problem
is getting worse and worse and it is really vital to take steps to encourage
people
to eat healthy
food
. In
this
essay
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I will look at the main causes of the
problem
and propose some solutions. One of the main causes of the
problem
is that it can be eating habits. These days
people
have a busy life and it can be difficult to balance healthy
food
with a busy lifestyle.
That is
why many eat what they have and certainly what they want.
Moreover
, it causes obesity. The solution is for the government to provide some kinds of comprehensive programs which help
people
follow their instructions. Another
problem
is that advertisements can have an influence on
people
.
That is
to say,
people
watch television or surf on the internet and see a lot of products,
such
as hamburgers, chips or fried chickens and want to eat them.
As a
result
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they become fat. To tackle
this
issue, the government must ban media to show unhealthy foods on TV A
third
cause of the
problem
is that
people
prefer to eat takeaway
food
or a ready meal rather than cook a healthy meal.
For instance
,in Navoi New Bazaar there are many shops where
people
buy hotdogs, as it is reasonably cheap. The way forward could be to increase the taxes on junk
food
and
this
would hopefully encourage
people
to eat healthier
food
and lose weight. To sum up, it is true that obesity is getting an increasingly worrying issue. In my point of view, governments, media have a role to play in tackling
this
problem
. Unless actions must be taken urgently, our societies will face even greater health problems in the future
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