Museums should display art of their own country, or they should display art from all over the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (May 2021) Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Museum
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is
place
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a place
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where all the
artifacts
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artefacts
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are displayed which not only have
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historical
importance
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but
also
represents the culture of the time they belong to. These act as a centre for tourist attractions where people from
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foreign
country
also
visit and gain knowledge about their significance in the world’s history.
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essay postulates the points on the reasons about county’s
art
to be restricted to its own but not anywhere in the world. I agree
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the notion that the
artifacts
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to a specific
country
must be confined to
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their
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own
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because they belong to that
country
and
the
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its
importance
can be more accurately known by even comparing it with the current circumstances in that area. A case in point is a museum located in Araku
Vallley
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Valley
in the state of Andhra Pradesh. The
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stored are those of the tribal people that were prevailing in
18th
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Century. It was beautifully explained by the local guide by drawing a comparison between the existing tribals to their ancestors. Another opinion is that
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the only necessity is that the
art
is being preserved irrespective of the
country
because the final agenda is to preserve it.
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, the
artifact
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that is
preserved in Spain
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belongs to Italy. It is a good thing that
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had it preserved for
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humankind to see , but the cultural
importance
cannot be known precisely with its presence in Spain. Considering both the scenarios , I strongly feel that the
art
should be kept in the museums of its own
country
in order to understand its
importance
and the
country
to which the
art
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should be one availing its revenue.
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