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Currently, there is a trend towards the use of alternative form of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they maybe dangerous. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Nowadays,there is an increased formation of various forms of illnesses and the availability of the usage of unconventional medicine is becoming a common practice by many. While there are amongst
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 are able to experience its efficiency, there are people who agree that using unscientifically proven drugs are only given
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 effect. From my personal standpoint, alternative medicine may not help and could only worsen medical conditions. The remainder of
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 essay shall outline both the viewpoints including the rationale behind my position on
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this
. It is considered by some
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that there are illnesses that can't be checked and
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undetected
detected
 by
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 body-checking machines and these conditions are
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some how
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 caused by unseen-negative energy flowing in the environment. The most
compellimng
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compelling
 reason for citing
this
 reason is that some patients would feel various symptoms but upon doctors' consultation, physicians are not able to properly diagnose the disease. that encouraging competitiveness among
children
 will yield better results. The most compelling reason for supporting
competition
 is that it prepares the
children
 for challenges in the real life.
For example
, when students grow up, they need to compete with other students for taking up jobs and careers.
Moreover
,
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 encourages
children
 to excel in everything they do. Everyone is challenged to do their best in order to win a
competition
.
For instance
, in Olympics, every participant is motivated to perform his best in the pursuit of
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 medal. As far as others are concerned, they believe a sense of cooperation in
children
 will prove more beneficial. A society focused solely on winning and
competing
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 disregard other traits
such
 as compassion and generosity.
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ideal
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an ideal
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 society, cooperation and teamwork are often required. Take companies
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 example, they will only achieve their overall goal if all employees work together. In conclusion, while both views are commonly held in the present society. I believe that cooperation is
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 important quality than
competition
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the competition
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. Given
this
 situation, it is recommended that schools should develop their framework to inculcate teamwork activities in the life of
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children
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children
.
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