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In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be a possible home, such as Mars. To what extent do agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a lot of people think that the future of humanity will not take place on
earth
 and governments should invest in research of other planets that have the potential for being a base of human life.
This
 essay disagrees with the opinion of these people and proposes that it would be pragmatic to take care of our planet in advance.
First
 and foremost, people think that our resources on
earth
 are limited,
therefore
, countries have to invest huge amounts of
money
 in space exploration.
Moreover
,
earth
 has some deeply rooted problems that can’t be solved in near future. Because of that seeking a possible new home is logical and necessary to be done.
On the other hand
,
although
 our planet has some issues, they can be solved with the same amount of
money
 needed for exploring other planets. From my aspect, one should be able to keep his/her house safe before looking for new adventures.
However
, there is always a probability that we are alone in
this
 universe.
Thus
, it wouldn’t be a risk-worthy investment to spend
money
 on. In conclusion, Even though, it may seem reasonable to carry space researches with tons of
money
.
That is
 illogical to seek adventures out of the
earth
,
instead
 of solving our own problems.
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