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Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #conflict #parents #part #whilst
it's clear, that teenager's conflict with
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their
 parents is a serious problem, but why do
people
 think that it is a necessary part of growing up? And why it should be minimized. At
first
, let's discuss why do some
people
 think why are
arguments
 with parents are necessary. In my
opinion
, some
people
 think so because they are planning to make their
child
 stress-sustainable and think faster in
arguments
,  but they don't look
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child's
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 mental health, which can be damaged during lots of
arguments
.
Secondly
, the other
opinion
 - if you have
ability
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 not to argue with your
teenager
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child
 - you should avoid it. It is the
oposite
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opposite
 of
first
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opinion
,
people
 who are closer to
this
opinion
 will be more supportive and understandable parents. Their
child
 will not have any mental health issues, but they will have problems during
arguments
 and they will not have any stress protection. The
last
 thing
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 is that
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 am closer to the
second
opinion
,
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 because
i
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 think that
people
's health
worth
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 more, than just being better
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 something.
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  • autonomy
  • individuality
  • emotional intelligence
  • conflict resolution skills
  • persistent
  • unresolved
  • communication gaps
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  • substance abuse
  • mental health issues
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  • family dynamics
  • quest for independence
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