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Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while others feel is should be purely optional. Discuss these opposing views and give your opinion.

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The relative importance of
sport
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 in
school
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life
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children
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 is the frequent topic of
dicussion
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discussion
. The opinion is divided
in to
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 two
side
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sides
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, whether
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sport
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the sport
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 should be compulsory or it
shold
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should
 be optional in
school
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. Obviously,
sport
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 enhances
a
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physical strength
to
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in
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 people. Playing sports will keep students in
school
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 healthy.
Beside
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from
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apply
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psysical
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physical
advantange
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advantage
, sports is a good
activities
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activity
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 to teach
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 how to respect and follow
the
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rule.
This
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 is an
essentail
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essential
skill
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 to live in
the
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society.
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, there might be some
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student
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students
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 that will be an athlete in
there
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their
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 future
live
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life
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 in which they require to explore in
student
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live
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life
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.
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,
sport
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 is indifferent from
other compulsory subject
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another compulsory subject
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.
On the other hand
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, there are
variety
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various
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skills
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of skills
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 that
children
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 can explore,
for example
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, coding,
programing
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programming
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, cooking, public speaking. These
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skill
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 are required in some
career
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careers
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.
Children
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 should have
choice
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the choice
a choice
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 to explore from their own choice. There are many education
system
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systems
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 that
permit
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permits
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 students to select their own elective subject,
sport
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 is one of the
choice
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choices
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. There aren't any
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 to prove that
sport
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 is important than other
skill
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.
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,
sport
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 should be one of the
elective
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electives
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 and optional to students. I personally believe that
sport
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 is an
essiential
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essential
 part of
life
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 for
children
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 because the nature of
children
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 is
enegetic
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energetic
,
also
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 they learn from playing. It
seem
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seems
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 like our genetic programs
children
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 to accelerate learning and
aquire
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acquire
skill
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 that will make them survive.
Sport
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 is one of the activities that teach
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a student
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student
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students
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a
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apply
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life
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 skills while consuming their energy. In conclusion, I strongly agree that
sport
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 should be compulsory in
school
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 for
children
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 because it is a good
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learning
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leaning
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learning
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activities
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activity
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 that will teach them
an
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early
life
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 skills.
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