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Should apply same laws on tobacco those laws also apply on heroine? Discuss

#laws #tobacco #heroine
The importance of
laws
 about the
consumption
 of
tobacco
 which is always debatable has now become more controversial with some
people
 deeming that not only some
laws
 which ban the sale and
consumption
 of heroin but
also
 on
tobacco
 which are two different things.
Thus
this
 essay will discuss
this
 trend and give a logical conclusion. There are myriad reasons why
people
 deem that sam
laws
 impose on
tobacco
 due to some bad effects of
tobacco
 on the body
that is
 why
people
 believe
this
 trend. ,
Basically
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consumption
 of
tobacco
 was not good for the human body because it is harsh effects on health and some part of the body fail due to the high level of
tobacco
consumption
that is
 why some
people
 would think that
tobacco
 should ban in their country.
Tobacco
 is an addictive
product
that is
 why
people
 have some problems to away with
tobacco
 in their daily routine. One of the other reasons is
people
 support
this
 trend.
However
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 there are some of these trends in my point of view. The
first
 and foremost is that
tobacco
 and heroin are two different things and two different
product
 for
people
that is
 why it is impossible to apply to same
laws
 on these are some
tobacco
product
that is
 useful for countries and some country important part of the economy because they are growing
tobacco
 and sell to other countries
that is
 why they are earning money and run ecosystem. To conclude according to the argument one can reach a conclusion that
tobacco
 is a different
product
 compared with heroin
that is
 why the law is
also
 different to apply to
this
product
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