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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people claim due to development of
technology
, rising the
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differences
 among the rich and the poor.
However
, others believe that the gap is declining.
This
 essay will discuss both points of view. On the one hand, one evidence reason why
differencies
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differences
 between the rich and the poor going upwards is the tendency of using
technology
such
 as smartphones or laptops are increasing.
Therefore
, a large number of people buying
technology
 is not
accessably
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accessible
accessibly
,
that is
 social
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differences
 are still existing.
Moreover
, in our
world
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 the popularity of bullying among teenagers are increasing for some
reasons
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the
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one of the problems of shaming someone is not having the smartphone of
popular
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the popular
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 brand.
Also
, it can be affected on studying too.
For instance
, Nowadays, online studying is popular, because of
worldwide
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 pandemic situation. if you have no cell phone or awful quality of
phone
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, you will not possible to do homework or participate
on
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 lessons.
On the other hand
, there is
range
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a range
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 of different prices and brands
tjat
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that
 provide computer smartphones which have
best
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 quality for students
for
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 example, individuals can find
evirything
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everything
 that they want on the internet or shops, with the available prices
In
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 my opinion, the
differencies
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differences
difference
 between is decreasing. In conclusion, some people argue about the range of the
technology
 is increasing the social
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differences
 But in real
life
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 there
is
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 more available prices
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