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People in limelight have a responsibility to set an example for other by their behavior Do you agree.

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Certain practices and human habits are highly influenced by the environment. The human sensory systems
such
 as auditory and visual sense can take environmental input and after
recieving
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receiving
those stimulus
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that stimulus
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, an
individiual
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individual
 will respond in the form of
behavioral
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 output. I somehow believe that public personalities
such
 as celebrities or the respectable,
influencial
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influential
politians
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politicians
has
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duty
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a duty
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diserable
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desirable
 traits as
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 can easily affect people around them.
This
 essay will cite some reasons
as
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 how public figures affect and
mold
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 other individuals way of
bahaving
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behaving
. When your profession or job can highly
infuence
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influence
 the masses or community. I agree that somehow, you are able to
influenced
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 other humans. It is said that celebrities and other famous
politicans
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politicians
 can partly influence the public.
This
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notable
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 people can impact some individuals generally.
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