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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the two charts below. You should write at least 150 words.

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Below are two pie charts which
illustrates
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 the highest level of
education
 of
women
 in
Someland
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Homeland
 between 1945 and 1995. Overall, the percentage of
women
 who attained a
first
 degree rose significantly from 1945 to 1995. Again, there were no
post graduate
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postgraduate
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 students in 1945 which changed visibly in 1995 with an impressive percentage while the high number of
womwn
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women
whom
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who
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 were not
entolled
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enrolled
 in school in 1945 vanished as shown in the 1995 chart which depicts the enrollment of all categories of
women
 at
defferent
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different
 levels of
education
.
Fourthermore
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Furthermore
, in 1945, zero
percent
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per cent
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 of
women
 had a
first
 degree which was in total contrast to the year 1995 as
first degree
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first-degree
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 holders sprang to an impressive 55
percent
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per cent
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. Notably, there were no
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postgraduate
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post graduate
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postgraduate
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 students as of 1945 with zero
percent
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per cent
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 but the
lattar
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latter
later
 improved to 20
percent
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per cent
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 by 1995. Another
information
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 that stood out from both pie charts were the number of
women
 in 1945 who did not
enroll
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enrol
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 in
high level
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high-level
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education
. 55
percent
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per cent
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 of
women
 were not in school as of 1945 in comparison to 1995 where that percentage fell to zero, meaning that by 1995, all
women
 in
Someland
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Homeland
 were enrolled in one form of academics/
education
 or the other.
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