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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Discus

It is largely argued that the most effective way to punish offenders is
putting
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by putting
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 them in
prison
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.
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Prison
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A prison
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 is an appropriate form of
punishment
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 for
people
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 who have harmed other
people
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 physically and mentally. Sometimes,
prison
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 cannot be a form of
punishment
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 in terms of making friends with other offenders and having luxuries. On the one hand,
prison
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 is an effective way of diminishing
criminals
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 in
the
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society. If the crime is more serious,
prison
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 is the most common
punishment
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 and
also
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, some
criminals
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 may pose a threat to society.
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, they should be put in
prison
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 to ensure the safety of other citizens.
Prison
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 is a necessary evil for more extreme measures. What is more, for
majority
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the majority
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 of crimes,
prison
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 is the best answer for those who have committed crimes
such
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 as murder and
violent
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 should carry the death penalty.
On the other hand
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,
prison
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 can not be an effective tool for
criminals
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 to become
a
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better
person
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people
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. Because
,
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 taking away
people
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's freedom can be the worst thing we can do to
man
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a man
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.
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,
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prison
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prisons
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 let inmates have luxuries
such
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 as video games, TVs and top chefs to cook their own food. In my opinion,
prison
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 is not a holiday camp and it should be
as
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a means of
punishment
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. And so, Inmates make friends with other offenders like themselves.
Prison
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 is a particularly good way to rehabilitate some
people
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, as it just educates them in the ways of
criminal
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criminals
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. To sum up,
prison
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 can be a good solution for
criminals
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 but, in our current society prisons are not an appropriate form of
punishment
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. I personally think that
prison
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 is not the best remedy for
criminals
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.

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