Environmental problems are becoming a global issue and are encounter-challenging the quality of life. Do you think that environmental problems will produce better results if it is addressed globally or it should be addressed by individual countries.

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the environmental
issues
in all over the world and face the
quality
of
life
. it seems that territory
problems
will construct
greater
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outcome
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it
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is addressed globally.
However
, others disagree with that and think the environmental
issues
should
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by individual
countries
.
This
essay will discuss the debate.
First
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statement,
proponent
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proponents
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with managed
nature
problems
globally believe that produce
greater
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a greater
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effect on
quality
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the quality
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of
life
because of the
nature
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variety
,
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if devoting the international organization to solve
this
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this problem
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problems
that has benefits for the earth.
Firstly
, it will be possible to
gathering
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around
of
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the best scientist and researchers with high information about
the
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nature
and Environmental. So, authorities can
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laws and control to follow rules by all
countries
.
Secondly
, there are some
countries
that have no suitable conditions or
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ways to solve
nature
problems
and produce
the
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better effects on
life
quality
. It seems the information and extensive solutions are more effective and
better
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results.
However
,
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the opponent
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opponent
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opponents
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with addressed habitant
issues
globally
,
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may believe solving these
problems
by individual
countries
is
greater
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the greater
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result on
life
quality
. Because
,
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managing every single part of the earth
such
as
countries
is
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more
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easier and can control carefully. In the following, every
countries
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know
the
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own environmental
issues
better than other international organization
such
as famine and drought. So, producing great effects on
life
quality
may
done
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by individual counties in better ways. But in my
view point
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that is
not the best solution for territory
issues
. In conclusion, it appears solving
issues
globally is greater than
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that by individual
countries
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental problems
  • global issue
  • quality of life
  • address
  • global approach
  • cooperation
  • innovative
  • sustainable
  • international agreements
  • treaties
  • collective action
  • equitable distribution
  • resources
  • responsibilities
  • unique challenges
  • tailored solutions
  • accountability
  • local ownership
  • development
  • capacity
  • combination
  • tackle
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