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Prison is the best punishment for criminals.Discuss.

#prison #punishment #criminals
Prison is a necessary evil
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 defaulters in the way of the criminal. It enables society to be much safer
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 depriving criminals of their freedom.To my mind,
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 must be an effective form of punishment, not a place where offenders are able to do what they want. There is no doubt that prison is the best answer for serious crimes
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 as serial killers and sex offences. If a person commits a crime , he or she arrests and sends to a special penalty column. Prisoners will be rehabilitated in both mental health and substance abuse treatment programs and prepared to return to the community.
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, jail should not be a camp for inmates which gives them some luxurious like video games and TVs .
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, prison is not a place where murderers enable to get an educational degree in some fields at the taxpayer's expense. In conclusion, it is recommended that criminals will be punished with a proper sentence for their wrongdoings. I believe that taking freedom is an
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 deterrent for would-be offenders.
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