Some people consider computers to be more of a hindrance than a help. Others believe that they have greatly increased human potential. How could computers be considered a hindrance?

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innovation
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many people do their documentation work through,
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machine At present, a large number of
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spend most of their time indoors and have less exposure to the external world because of the busy tempo of modern life.
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will have
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of experience with and
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lack of understanding of nature,
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, these will affect
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in
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way and may cause some problems with them in the future. When
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mostly stay indoors and do not experience outdoor
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, they will not have out-of-classroom experiences.
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should be stimulated to discover their surrounding
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environment
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, they should be encouraged to solve some problems from easy to difficult in order to their proper developments.
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took me to the sea when I was a child. While I was walking on the beach, I am learning some small creatures under the sand
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as crabs and shells.
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, my
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took me to the aquarium, I learnt about submarine lives. From my perspective, the knowledge and experiences which were produced while we were young will influence us to solve some tough problems in the future. Apart from these, one of the disadvantages of not spending their time outdoors is
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of social skills. They should play outsides with their friends. Doing
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with
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helps them to learn how to communicate and live with
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,
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took their
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to play with other
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in the park. Their
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could learn how to play with their friends,
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their toys
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in their groups.
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, they will learn how to live peacefully with
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. In my opinion, their social skills
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not less important than their knowledge because successful people should have both
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cognitive
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and
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. In summary, when
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always
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indoors and
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to do interesting
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,
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will get
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chances to learn new abilities and social skills. So, they might be inferior capabilities and they might not be able to apply their knowledge in
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problem solving
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process. As I have
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a reason why
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should encourage their
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to participate in outdoor
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