Some people consider computers to be more of a hindrance than a help. Others believe that they have greatly increased human potential. How could computers be considered a hindrance?
The computer machine lack of understanding of nature,
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are
great Change the verb form
is
inovation
by the mankind it has changed Correct your spelling
innovation
many
life Replace the quantifier
much
i
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dont
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don't
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machine asCorrect article usage
a
distractful
thing because in Correct your spelling
distrustful
village
many people do their documentation work through, Add an article
the village
a village
this
machine At present, a large number of children
spend most of their time indoors and have less exposure to the external world because of the busy tempo of modern life. Children
will have insufficiency
of experience with andReplace the word
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a
consequently
, these will affect children
in negative
way and may cause some problems with them in the future.
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a negative
children
mostly stay indoors and do not experience outdoor activities
, they will not have out-of-classroom experiences. Children
should be stimulated to discover their surrounding enveroment
. Correct your spelling
environment
environments
In addition
, they should be encouraged to solve some problems from easy to difficult in order to their proper developments. For example
, my parents
took me to the sea when I was a child. While I was walking on the beach, I am learning some small creatures under the sand such
as crabs and shells. Moreover
, my parents
took me to the aquarium, I learnt about submarine lives. From my perspective, the knowledge and experiences which were produced while we were young will influence us to solve some tough problems in the future.
Apart from these, one of the disadvantages of not spending their time outdoors is lack
of social skills. They should play outsides with their friends. Doing Correct article usage
a lack
activities
with others
helps them to learn how to communicate and live with others
. For instance
, parents
took their children
to play with other children
in the park. Their children
could learn how to play with their friends, shared
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to
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with
others
and participated
in their groups. Wrong verb form
participate
Thus
, they will learn how to live peacefully with others
. In my opinion, their social skills is
not less important than their knowledge because successful people should have both Change the verb form
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apply
intelligent
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emotional
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emotionally
intelligent
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intelligence
children
always stays
indoors and Change the verb form
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do not
out
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outdoor
door
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the door
activities
, children
will get less
chances to learn new abilities and social skills. So, they might be inferior capabilities and they might not be able to apply their knowledge in Change the quantifier
fewer
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the problem
problem solving
process. As I have Add a hyphen
problem-solving
mention
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mentioned
that is
a reason why parents
should encourage their children
to participate in outdoor activities
.
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