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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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The extinction of creatures and loss
bio-diversity
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of bio-diversity
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 are affected by human activities
on
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 the global ecosystem. There are various reasons for
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, but measures could be taken to tackle
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 problem. There are several explanations for the human activities have negative effects on the population of species and bio-diversity on the world’s ecosystem.
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, overhunting wild
animals
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increases
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 significantly all over the world.
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 is because
hunters
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 and companies earn huge
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amount of money from trading wild
animals
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’ body
part
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parts
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, meat and feathers,
hunters
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 will poach wild
animals
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such
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 as bears, crocodiles and rhinos as much as possible.
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,
human
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humans
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 dump numerous
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amount of
plastic
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waste
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 on the oceans.
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 is largely detrimental for marine
animals
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 which thought
plastic
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waste
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like
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 their food,
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 they will die
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 they cannot digest
plastic
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waste
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 like
plastic
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 containers and
plastic
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 bottles.
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, according to a survey by Vietnam express in 2020 in Nha Trang, 5% of
population
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the population
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 of turtles decreased per year because they ate
plastic
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 containers which floated on the surface of
Nha
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the Nha
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 Trang sea. In order to address
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 issue, governments should take a few steps. One might be to impose strict laws on
hunters
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 and
organization
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organizations
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 who hunt wild
animals
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 for trading and producing
purpose
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purposes
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. By doing
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,
hunters
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 and organizations will have to decline the poaching
animals
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 which lives in forests and safaris. Another sensible approach is that governments should have programmes to enhance people’s awareness about
bad
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the bad
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 effects of
plastic
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waste
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to
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on
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 marine creatures.
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, people will have actions
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that
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 are more environmentally friendly than before
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 as reducing, recycling and reusing
plastic
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waste
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 or taking
plastic
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waste
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 in the ocean regularly. In conclusion, there are a
number of
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number of
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species and biodiversity are on the brink of extinction because of
influences
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the influences
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 of humans on the global ecosystem.
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,
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 problem will be less likely to happen if governments impose strict rules on
hunters
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 and companies and organize projects to
rise
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raise
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 the publics’ perception.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • habitat destruction
  • deforestation
  • urbanization
  • overexploitation
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • invasive species
  • conservation
  • sustainable practices
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • ecosystems
  • species population
  • genetic diversity
  • environmental awareness
  • protected areas
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