In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to the latest fashion. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or a negative development?

To date, in most countries, people would choose their attire and hairdos based on
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current trends. These changes have had a huge impact on our lives. Yet it has both pros and cons. The following paragraphs will discuss the key factors of
this
scenario
as well as
the consequences. To commence with, it can not be denied that
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fashion updation has been in
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life for ages. Even I would say that homosapians had changed their clothes from leaves to
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skin mere result of fashion curiosity. Since
then
, humans have always been in changing
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of dressing sense and hairstyles.
Nevertheless
, I wonder how
this
tendency had a smash sensation around the world at the same time
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Perhaps there are two main reasons to substantiate
this
statement.
Firstly
, good clothing and trendy hairstyles have been a symbol of affluence.
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, on ,occasions people always end up spending too much money on
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designer's
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boutiques.
Secondly
,
due to
mass business and frequent advertisements teens would buy unwanted things
then
they will deem that as super cool. To add
further
, if any other kids, in their community, wear less attractive
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might be considered abnormal,
not to mention
there is a high chance
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bullied by others. Undoubtedly, the fashion industry has become a well-paid area, though
on the other hand
, to earn money they are exploiting other labour.
For instance
, brand companies like Gucci,Michal Kors and Guess made their
customers
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mindset
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expensive one is quality
one
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which is most of the time not true.
To conclude
,
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my point of view that up-to-date trendy and
being
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tidy is essential for a better appearance,
although
it must not be a waste of money. Because
this
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psychological disturbance to underprivileged people.
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task response
The essay discusses the impact of fashion trends on people's clothing and hairstyles, and it considers both the positive and negative aspects. However, some points are unclear and the examples provided could be stronger and more relevant.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the ideas are not always logically organized, and some sentences lack coherence and do not flow well.
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