The only way to improve safety of our roads is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In our modern era,the
roads
we ply
everyday
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has become very risky because of the road traffic accidents
drivers
and pedestrian are faced with on a daily basis.
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that is
,
government
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the government
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should enforce strict
punishment
for those who offend the rules and regulations on our
roads
.
To begin
with,most people are afraid of being given
the
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ticket when they park on the wrong side of the road.By giving out tickets to bad
drivers
,it
in turn
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corrects
drivers
who drive haphazardly on our years and
hence
improving
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safety.
This
style of
punishment
for instance
is
mostly
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common in the Western
worlds
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.
In addition
,another
punishment
that can be given to recalcitrant
drivers
to improve
free
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movement of driver and pedestrians are to fine them an amount of money when they are found to bend the rules.
Also
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they can be sent to police custody if they break a major
on
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the
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rule on our
roads
.
For Example
,a driver who drives on the path meant for walking should be picked up by the police to deter other road users from
repeaing
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repeating
repealing
the same act.
Finally
,I agree with the statement that much difficult
punishment
like, giving out fines,arrest by the police are some of the ways that can improve safety on our
roads
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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