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Write an essay presenting the pros and cons of teenagers owning mobile phones

#teenagers #phones
Everyone uses
mobile
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phone
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phones
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 - adults and teenagers. They are
very
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 important part of our daily lives and we do a lot of things using them.
However
 young people use mobile phones more often
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than
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that
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the
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adults.
This
 technology gives them easy access to information which helps them studying
for example
. Using
internet
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the internet
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 on your smartphone
help
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 you to do and find what you need which can save money too. You don’t need to buy books or go to lessons to learn something. But
as
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everything
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 it has its advantages and disadvantages. Playing games and having social media accounts leads to many hours staring at the screen which can cause eye problems and more. It leads to obsession and less
communicating
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 in real life. Teenagers forget about their homework and prefer to stay on their phones
then
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having
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 bad grades in school. They become lazy and can’t focus on important things. In conclusion, mobile phones can be a good thing if you use them properly if not it can influence
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 on you.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Smartphones
  • Instant access
  • Educational apps
  • Enhanced communication
  • Navigation
  • Tech skills
  • Distraction
  • Productivity
  • Inappropriate content
  • Cyberbullying
  • Privacy concerns
  • Overreliance
  • Social skills
  • Double-edged sword
  • Responsibly
  • Mitigate
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