Some people say that feeling of competition should be encouraged in children others say they should be taught to become cooperative. What is your opinion?
Children are the tender buds of society and they are required to be taught the true
values
of life. Therefore
, some people tend to believe that the feeling of the game should be infused in them while
others
believe that the possession of cooperative values
is required for them. I will discuss the merits and demerits of both
aspects before reaching any opinion.
To begin
with, there are many reasons why children should be having
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have
values
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.
Firstly
, match motivates youngsters to accelerate their efforts to attain a higher level in
education and in other activities. They start Change preposition
of
doing work
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working
others
and understand the value of hard work. This
dedication and hard work help them to stand first everywhere. Secondly
, computational values
inculcate self-confidence and self-independence in children. When they participate in activities and compete with others
, they are more likely to have a feeling of self-achievement and fulfilment. They feel worthy that
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and
provide
them balanced and peaceful mind. They tend to become self-reliant and that Correct subject-verb agreement
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ability in them. Correct your spelling
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Moreover
, a sense of completion is the need of the hour. Undoubtedly, in the modern era, people since
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from
their
childhood till adults, face completion Correct pronoun usage
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tournament
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grow
adults, they face Verb problem
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getting
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Thus
, a value is highly required.
On the other hand
, it is needless to say that
how important is it to inculcate the value of cooperation. Correct word choice
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This
is the only feeling by which a child can learn teamwork, team spirit, co-existence, tolerance, and patience. Moreover
, if history is seen it becomes quite evident that the well-known icons of the society are only those who had a helping and sacrificing attitude. A self-centred human being cannot earn fame in society. Secondly
, incessant preaching for
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about
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feeling for
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. These rivalry
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others
can never hold good for themselves and for others
.
To conclude
, after gauging both
, competitional and cooperative values
, I feel that both
values
have their own importance. Thus
, a child should be brought up by imparting both
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