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Some people prefer to live in the same place most of their life, but others like to live in different places. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Residence
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The residence
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 is considered
as
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the
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an
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 important
factors
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factor
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 for residents. Some people are fond to stay in the same
place
 for
entire
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their entire
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 life, while others are eager to frequently change the
place
 to live. In
this
 essay, both
of
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viewpoints will be discussed, which I presumably prefer to live like the former view. On the
on
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one
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 hand, it is obvious that home is the most comfortable and safe zone for everyone.
Therefore
, some people do not want to change their home's location as they feel more comfortable
to
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in
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 the
place
 where they've lived for
long
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a long
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 time.
For example
, they're familiar with the
community
such
 as neighbours who can be trusted to talk with, and the environment that they see
everyday
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. Due to
this
 reason, many individuals prefer to live in the same
community
 rather than
oftenly
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often
 change house's location.
On the other hand
, as residents live in the same
place
 for
long
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 time, they can get bored to the monotonous
community
 so that changing the
place
 to live may be a good idea for someones. From my experience, in the
first
 week of living in Chiba, Tokyo, I was so excited about
with
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the new
community
, environment, and neighbours, which was a remarkable moment for me.
Moreover
, hotels and resorts are identified as the different places that can provide you
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with the
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the
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a
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 new experience for living in the new environment.
Thus
, altering your residences can provide you joyfulness and awaken the feeling of adventure. In conclusion,
although
 living in different places is able to give you an exciting feeling, I prefer to live in the same
place
 for all of my life as I am satisfied with my current
community
, and I feel safe living in the same
place
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stability
  • Predictability
  • Connection
  • Community
  • Cultural Exposure
  • Personal Growth
  • Adaptability
  • Open-mindedness
  • Economic Opportunities
  • Career Advancement
  • Relocation
  • Hometown
  • Social Ties
  • Emotional Support
  • Sense of Belonging
  • Thrill
  • Excitement
  • Familiarity
  • Tradition
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