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Prison is the best punishment for criminals do you agree or disagree

#prison #punishment #criminals
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There are different types of criminals in our life.
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 killers, pains, illegal traffickers and others. But prison is the same for all gangland. The way I see it confinement must be disjoined according to wrongdoing. In
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essay I will tell what the community think about confinement and in my ,conclusion you know about my opinion. Some populations agree that prison is nice because it sends out a strong message to would-be organized transgression and they worry to commit a violation. They think that imprisonment is the most severe type of punishment for the mob and that it prevents them from committing other crimes. The use of syndicate there is
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 believed to be a form of punishment. Other public
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 that because they think that penitentiary now has all the conditions and that it does not serve to guide syndicate on the right path. In ,fact lockup should be divided into two types, separate for those who have committed serious wrongdoing, imprisonment for a felony there should be separate jail for those taken, and the types of punishment here should
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. In ,conclusion my opinion is that the penitentiary is not really a scary place right now. society who have committed crimes do not fully regret what they have done and continue to do so again after their release. penitentiary as well as penalties in it I think it should be a little heavier
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