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Prison is the best punishment for criminals.Discuss

The way I see,no so.Because you and I have witnessed criminals commit crimes again without hesitation , even after they have served their sentences in prison.The reason,prisons cannot meet the demands of the times.Many cite good prison conditions as the reason for
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, but they are unaware that inmates do not change for the better as conditions worsen nor can mistreatment of prisons cause apply remorse rather, it makes criminals The way I see, ​we should do something completely different.
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, prisoners should not be given free time.How do you say?I think we need to teach more fiction
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 because fiction is a great help in finding oneself. Or if we consider the crime unconscious , more psychological conversations with prisoners should be conducted, psychological lessons should be taught.I think it is necessary to do hard work in your free time,and in
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 way to teach honest work.But
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 method is not suitable for everyone either. Even if a thousand measures are taken for some they say, they will make a grave, none of them will be blind. Even after so many conditions have been created, the death penalty should be maintained in the state for those who commit crimes again.Because society does not need
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 people. They only paint society black

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