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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is often said that living in
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another country
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country
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 where you should speak
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language
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the language
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 except for your mother
language
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 can cause not only practical
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 but
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 serious social
problems
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. I completely agree with
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 statement.
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 of all, it is possible that you feel lonely and become depressed. Because I believe good communication, speaking the same
language
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, is very important for building good relationships because it is necessary to understand the person well.
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, you may spend alone at home on holiday unless you have friends who live in
same
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country
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. If you do that for a long time, you could get mental illnesses.
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, the opportunity to hang out with those friends will be increased by speaking the
country
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language
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.
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, when you face some troubles, it is difficult for you to tell your opinion or the situation correctly. To give an example, the stuff which you bought is broken can be
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an exchange
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exchanged
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exchange
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exchanged
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 or
refunded
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. In
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 case, you should tell the staff about
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of
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with
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 the product. Yet, if you cannot do that, you have to receive
broken
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a broken
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 one.
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, the ability to tell
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a situation
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 like
that is
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 important not to be at a disadvantage. Having considered all the arguments above, it can be said that
the
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serious social
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 are caused as well as practical
problems
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 if you live in a
country
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 where you should speak
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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.
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, I believe learning
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language
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the language
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 spoken in the
country
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 is helpful to make your life there better.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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