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Some people believe that nowadays we have too manychoices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Certain people think that we are provided too many options these days. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 statement. We can get many
kinds
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 of choices because of technology development.
To begin
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internet
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 is
extremely
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 useful tool for people.
First
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, you can gain a lot of
information
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 by using
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internet
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the internet
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.
For instance
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, when you face some troubles or want to start new
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, probably you can find
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solutions or great ways on the
internet
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. It became easier to search
any
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for any
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kinds
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 of
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things
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 compared to the time when there was no
internet
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.
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, you can buy many
kinds
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 of
things
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. To give examples, if you
resister
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register
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 your credit card
information
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, you can shop online without visiting actual shops, and they are delivered
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 house.Location or time does not matter.
On the other hand
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, you may feel tired or be confused without noticing because you automatically see not
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information
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 which you need but
also
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unnecessary
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 one. It may affect your mental health.
In addition
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, you could be at
risks
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risk
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 for security. You should check whether the website is safe or not before you fill credit card number in the form.
Internet
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 is
quite
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 useful tool, but you should be careful not to face
some
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 danger. To sum up,
few
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a few
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 people say that recently there are a lot of
things
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 which we can choose, and I totally support
this
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 opinion. The reason is that thanks to technology, we can get any
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kinds
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 of
information
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 and
things
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 anywhere and anytime. At the same time, you have to pay attention
for
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 your security.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
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