Some people believes that parents force their children to get sucess but other believes they need to teach them values of cooperation? Give your opinion with relevant examples?
In the 21st century,
parents
are considered as
the real pillars of human development because their Change preposition
apply
way
of training makes everyone's life
more accurate in modern lifestyle more accurate. In my opinion, I strongly believes
that a person can Change the verb form
believe
lead
healthier Verb problem
make
choices
in adult life
with the advice of their parents
. It will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
However
, in human life
adults need people caring and Add a comma
life,
suggestion
in which they can make their Fix the agreement mistake
suggestions
choices
more relevant to society. For example
, according to
American
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the American
psychological
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Psychological Association
association
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association,
parents
should be the real agent
of socialization of children to carry Fix the agreement mistake
agents
their
roles in a proper Change preposition
out their
way
of manner. Apparently, childhood practice and way
of life
greatly influence one
's adult life
successful
. Replace the word
success
Therefore
, they can modify behaviour
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their behaviour
according to
the progress of material life
. Admittedly, the
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apply
decision
like career Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
choices
, approaches of
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to
life
, behaviour towards others and marital status are
greatly influence Unnecessary verb
apply
one
's parents
real family experiences.
Change noun form
parents'
parent's
On the other hand
, everyone need
a balanced Change the verb form
needs
life
to keep changes in their choices
. Moreover
, the world is
now carried out many destructive changes like crimes, alcoholism, drug addiction, and sexual Verb problem
has
abuses
. Fix the agreement mistake
abuse
Hnce
, guardians and their Correct your spelling
Hence
way
of life
influence youngsters. To illustrate this
, according to
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the crime
crime record bureau
of India, 70% of adult suicides are carried out mainly because of unhealthy family Correct your spelling
Crime Record Bureau
life
with their parents
. So imparting maturity on one
's mind will make their decision more accurate.
In conclusion, there is a saying 'a bird without wings' similarly
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Similarly
parents
are inevitable for one
's dreamy life
. For
instance
everyone should keep in mind that we are all responsible for our own children's future Add a comma
instance,
life
to Fix the agreement mistake
lives
lead
Verb problem
make
a happy and prosperous decisions
.Correct the article-noun agreement
happy and prosperous decisions
a happy and prosperous decision
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