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in some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. it is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. to what extent do you agree or disagree whit this opinion.

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It has been noted that increased consumption of fast foods in some continents has led to a good number of people suffering from medical conditions. Will it be beneficial for the
government
 to impose measures to cab the overuse of
such
 products? I partly disagree with
this
 statement. My position is articulated
further
 in the essay below.
To begin
 with, I believe that it is a personal initiative to decide on eating
such
 goods in moderation in order to evade some illnesses.
For instance
, if the
government
 imposes higher
taxes
 on fast foods with the intention of controlling consumption,
this
 may not be a problem to some wealthy individuals because they may still have adequate funds to acquire them despite the high
taxes
.
Further
 still,
this
 act by the
government
 to impose higher
taxes
 may infringe the rights of its citizens.
For example
, we have individuals in our community who eat in moderation and
therefore
 imposing
taxes
 may make the product inaccessible even for those who are keen on keeping fit.
On the contrary
, there is
also
 a possibility that the
government
's act of imposing
taxes
 on fast foods may lead to a declining number of medical conditions arising from
such
 cuisine.
This
 is true to some extent as it may control access to
such
 products due to a lack of adequate funds to consume them more frequently. In conclusion,
therefore
, I appreciate the fact that it is an
indivudual's
Correct your spelling
individual's
 responsibility to watch our eating habits as
this
 may directly affect one's health,
however
, as I discussed in the essay, governments involvement by hiking the
taxes
 on
such
 commodities may lead to a healthier nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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