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Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is said by many individuals that, every wild
species
 should be protected, but few argue that only some
animals
 should be saved not all.
While
, some
animals
 are endangered, so it is mandatory to protect that particular kind at any cost. So, let's explain
this
 in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, a plethora of wild
animals
 are living in forests, they depend upon each other either for community or for getting food. As we all know
that
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it is natural who keep balance,
for example
, Snake,
who
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eats her own child under her coverage,
otherwise
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a number of her
child
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 not engulf, they might be so much spread and will be more than
human
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 population. So, these kinds of generations are not necessary to be saved.
Moreover
, many
species
 have become extinct in the past time period, like dinosaurs, which is just seen in the photos
as well as
 in 3D movies.
Secondly
, it is essential to protect particular kinds of
animals
 that are less in number,
for instance
, the tiger has become an endangered
species
,
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 tigers are found in forests and some zoos. So, it is the duty of the government to preserve
this
 wild animal.
Although
 it is a very fast and furious animal, we cannot deny that it is a national animal of India and a status symbol for countries.
Furthermore
, a special kind of treatment should be provided in case of illness and they should be treated wisely in zoos. In conclusion, the authorities should take some steps to protect particular
species
 like
tiger
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, they should organize the conference at
international
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 level and find out
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 solutions to save it ,
otherwise
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 they might be extinct one day like a dinosaur.
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task response
The essay does not fully address the task, as the arguments are not clearly presented and do not provide a balanced discussion of both views. Additionally, the essay lacks clear and comprehensive ideas and fails to provide relevant specific examples to support the arguments.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is somewhat coherent, with identifiable introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas lacks coherence and fails to provide clear connections between the main points.

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