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The world would be a much poorer place without colour. To what extent would you agree or disagree.

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Colours
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 are one of the greatest blessings that god has bestowed upon people in the
world
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. Have you ever thought
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 it would be like to live in a
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 without
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 Forget everything for a moment and start using your imagination. Try to think how you would feel if people, cats, dogs, birds, butterflies and fruits had no
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 at all. You would never want to live in
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 a
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. Would you?
Colours
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 have a crucial role in man’s communication with the outside
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 and in the proper functioning of his memory. Hearing or touch alone, are not enough to define objects. How can we define colourless flowers placed on a colourless table
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 eye can recognise millions of
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. Identifying objects and our surroundings are not the only benefits of a diversity of
colours
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.
Colours
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 give us a lot of pleasure. The beautiful blue sky, the blood red sunset or a rainbow after a rainfall do add happiness to our lives. The
colours
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 of nature have been arranged so as to appeal to the human soul. Nowadays some prisons are painted pink and green to put prisoners in a better mood.
Colours
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 hold a special significance in our culture
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. In some parts of the
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 white is worn for weddings and black for funerals. In other parts white is the
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 of mourning. Red is the symbol of love. Red
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 represents danger. Blood is red; fire engines are red and traffic signals are
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 red
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 reflect the personality of a person. The
colour
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 of your clothes can have a considerable impact on how you are perceived. Light
colour
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 reflects a sober personality.
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 have been used as a treatment
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 some mental disorders. To put it in a nutshell, I can say that the
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 would definitely be a much poorer place without
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. They add life and beauty to our
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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