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Many of the products we buy nowadays break or wear out very quickly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this for manufacturers and the public?

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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of methods used by three different countries to tackle
waste
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 products. Overall, it is obvious that, in both
Sweden
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 and the
UK
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, burying the
waste
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 underground is the most popular practice, contributing more than half of the overall proportion. While in
Korea
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, most of the dangerous materials
is
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 recycled. Looking into the details, 55% of
waste
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 products in
Sweden
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, 82% in the
UK
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, and 22% in
Korea
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 are filled into landfill sites. Incineration, the method in which the materials are destroyed by fire, is
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 used among all three nations, with 20%, 9%, and 2%, in
Sweden
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,
Korea
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, and the
UK
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, respectively. Recycling has been adopted the most specifically in
Korea
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, up to 69%. While there is no recycling in the
UK
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, 25% of the harmful
waste
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 is recycled in
Sweden
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.
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, chemical treatment and dumping the
waste
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 at the sea is a unique method
that is
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 only found using in the
UK
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, at only 8% for both practices.
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