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Many large cities around the world lack affordable housing. What problems does a lack of affordable housing cause? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, more and more
people
 can't afford their own house in big
cities
, which has aroused public concern. In my opinion, one root of
this
 problem lies in
people
's extravagant pursuit of living in big
cities
. Big
cities
 have more employment opportunities, higher income levels, better medical and educational resources and richer social services. In short, big
cities
 have many resources that
people
 can take advantage of.
Therefore
, it is no wonder that
people
 want to live in big
cities
, and even some outsiders with good development in their hometown have to squeeze into big
cities
 for their planned future life. Another is the excessive housing speculation. Some
people
 are crazy about buying estates to raise prices in order to make more money. The number of
people
 who choose to invest in real estate is gradually increasing, and the house price is
also
 rising. After the rise, it
also
 attracts more
people
.
Finally
, the house price gradually rises in a vicious circle. From the original residential attribute to speculative attribute. In order to solve the above problems, the government should reduce the gap between the rich and the poor, formulating policy to limit the number of houses purchased by the rich and
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 the rich pay more property taxes to reduce the housing pressure of the poor.
In addition
, the government
also
 needs to focus on accelerating the process of urbanization and improving the infrastructure in rural areas and small and medium-sized towns, striving to make young
people
 willing to stay in their hometown for development and settlement.
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