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Nowadays, sending children to boarding school(either in other countries or in their own countries) is becoming increasingly popular. Why is it?. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Discipline in a student’s
life
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 is most important to lead a successful
life
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. Some people believe that it can be obtained by sending their
children
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 to boarding schools while others opine that it will cause an adverse effect on the
child
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’s
development
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. I perceive that for leading a self-dependent
life
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, it's very important to be in that environment from the start; so moving the
child
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 to boarding
school
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 is the supreme decision that can be taken by
parents
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 for their bright future, so it is a positive outcome for youngsters.
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 point will be elaborated on in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly
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, studying at boarding is very beneficial for
students
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 as it provides a suitable and appropriate environment where the student gets well trained and becomes ready to face challenges for every walk of
life
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.
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, the quality of education that the student will receive is always higher than any state board teaching and the
students
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 under proper guidance; can perform really well in their studies. Though
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, he/she may feel that they are getting strained by the amount of hard work and dedication they put in,
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, it will all be fruitful for them in the long run.
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, youngsters become more self-dependent as they need to perform their day-to-day activities on their own without any external aid given by their family members.
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, a sense of responsibility is being generated in one’s
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 when one lives in
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 an atmosphere.
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this
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, these
students
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 not only become sincere but
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 develop various interpersonal skills like not getting easily distracted by the surroundings, communication skills etc.
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, a freshman can receive a quality education when sent to a boarding
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.
On the contrary
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, some people consider that sending their
children
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 to boarding
school
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 will affect a
child
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’s mental health and that it portrays a negative
development
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 in society.
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 it will helpful for a
child
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 to be in
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 strict surroundings, the
child
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 needs more attention and love from their family members in the early stages of their mental
development
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. For an instance, it is found that
children
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 become more homesick and it becomes difficult for them to make friends or any relation over there. Some kids may
also
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 not feel comfortable being there as there can be a total change from the home atmosphere to drilling one.
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, it may be hard for some
parents
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 even to send their
children
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 away from them and
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 spend exorbitant fees for the same. In my opinion,
children
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 need more space to grow mentally when they are totally dependent on the self and that can be made possible when
parents
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 give them an opportunity to let them explore by sending them to boarding
school
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.
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, the
students
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 will be able to recognize their own talents and explore on their own with help of guardians and peers over there which will help them eventually in the future race of
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 because, after a certain age, one has to run their
life
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 with some rules and regulations.
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, I believe that
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 is a positive
development
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 for the
children
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 and the society and the government should support
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 idea and promote
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 kind of education as
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 is only for the welfare of the future generation. In conclusion, while other people’s opinions may vary, I believe that sending
children
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 to boarding
school
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 or abroad is very thoughtful and should be encouraged by
parents
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 and other parts of the society as well; as it totally depends upon the
parents
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 how to nurture their
child
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 and take out the best of them for their bright
life
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 ahead.

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