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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines does this development has more advantages or disadvantages

#home #hands #machines #development
Nowadays technologies
has
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 been improved very well. And
people
 consider that
machines
facilitates
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 their life. Actually,
improvement
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 of
machines
 has more benefits than drawbacks.
To begin
 with,
machines
 which
helps
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help
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 with many
houseworks
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housework
house works
 save a lot of time.
For instance
,
people
 should not
to
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wash clothes by themselves. There are washing
machines
 to do that. Just imagine humanity has more time to
development
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.
This
devices
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device
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 works quickly. And
people
 should not
to
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spend their priceless time to do many households.
Technologies
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 faster and more efficient to perform menial jobs than
human
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a human
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being
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beings
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.
On the other hand
,
main
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the main
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 con
that
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is that
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machines
affects
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on
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human health. I mean because of
devices
 some
people
 have
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle. They do
less
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fewer
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 physical movements. If they will continue like that, they would so weak to all diseases.
For example
, one man does not even walk
at
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on
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road
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the road
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 to breathe with clear air. He just enjoying, because of
technologies
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technology
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. Laziness has power over
this
 man. He never will change
this
 lifestyle, because it is really comfortable. In conclusion,
although
 the usage of
devices
 in tasks is beneficial for
the
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mankind. It makes living convenient, but some
people
 disagree with that. They believe that it is harmful
for
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to
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 health.
Nevertheless
, the advantages are
ourweight
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overweight
outweigh
 the disadvantages, if
people
 use
devices
 correctly, only for good reason.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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