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some people think the best way to solve global enviromental problems is to increase the cost of fuel to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #cost #fuel
Every country faces global environmental problems and they are very concerned about how to decrease those problems.
Although
, it is sometimes thought the best way to solve it
to
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 increase the cost of fuel. In my opinion, I considered that environmental issues can be solved in different manners. There are several reasons to decline the matter of global environmental. The
first
 and foremost important thing is that to ban the single-use of
plastic
.
Plastic
 is a non-biodegradable item and it is very harmful to the environment.
For instance
, in one survey has conducted in the UK, 50% of environmental causes are happened by
plastic
.
In addition
, if government take
a
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strict action against
use
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 of
plastic
such
 as
plastic
 bottles, straws, carry bags and so on so,it is possible to reduce that problem. Another point to consider to solve the environmental problem is to encourage
people
for
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 more plantations. In big cities, more
people
 are doing deforestations to build tall buildings and industries and it
is
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also
 affects weather changes.
For example
, without
trees
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 it is very hard to keep the air clean and neat and
people
 are getting a lack of rain.
Hence
,
palnts
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plants
 and trees are the best way to stop
that problems
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.
On the other hand
, fuel is responsible for getting more issues in
environment
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the environment
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. nowadays persons prefer their own vehicles for transportations and
this
 trend is booming.
In addition
, raising the cost of
fule
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fuel
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 could
be help
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 to fall down the global warming. In conclusion, numerous ways are available to solve the global environmental issues and government should encourage
people
 to use renewable things and try to solve them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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