Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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Many
people
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opine that at present days
people
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have the opportunity to choose from huge while others think
otherwise
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.I totally agree with the above statement,due to, now the advertising
companies
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are manipulating their customers by providing numerous options and services
also
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product
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companies
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are giving several opportunities of one thing to attract
people
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to choose their desired one.The following passages will provide an extensive idea about the above statement .
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with,
people
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are going to be persuaded by different advertising company which offers fascinated
products
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in
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less price .
Public
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are
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influenced to purchase belongings by watching advertisements on television though these
products
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might not be necessary for them.
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, by presenting glamorous actors,advertisers present
their
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the benefits of their products
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products
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benefits in front of
audience
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an audience
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,so that ,
stuff
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staff
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can recognize their
desire
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products
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.
Moreover
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,
Companies
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are launching their
products
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with a nominal price with
best
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quality,
instead
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of advertising
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firms
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firm
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it would be quite difficult to know.Lowest cost enhance the
cunsumers
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consumers
consumer's
ability to choose,as well as,
companies
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competition to grab
customer
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offers humongous facilities with cheaper rate.
As a result
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,
people
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can choose among different company's
product
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which will be affordable and flawless for them.
On the other hand
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,
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the customer
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customer
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customers
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love to get
discount
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discounts
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and offers ,
hence
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,
manufacture
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manufacturing
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companies
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are offering prizes and huge discounts which encourage
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the customer
a customer
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customer
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customers
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to buy
products
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. Nowadays,
people
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can get to know about different
products
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through modern technology,these could be originated in abroad.If any
product
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is able to serve the
customer
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's requirements, different
company
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companies
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import that good and serve
to
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apply
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that
customer
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. So easy to get service increase the demand of
variety
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a variety
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of choices.
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, though Apple mobile
is not produce
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is not produced
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in our country, with the blessings of comfortable communication we can purchase it by having
at
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it at
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home.
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, in
market
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the market
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there
have
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a lot of
option
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options
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of
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for
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one
product
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,
consequently
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, consumers are likely to choose the
product
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with
friendly
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the friendly
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amount. To recapitulate, with the assistance of numerous influencers like advertising
companies
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,
public
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the public
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get to know
price
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the price
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, merits and quality of a
product
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,and
availability
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the availability
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of that
product
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with different cost concede a
customer
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to choose perfectly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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