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Nowadays automation is being used to drive cars. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or a negative development?

#automation #drive #cars #development
In
last
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 few decades, every
sectors
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 have been upgrading with new high tech devices and Technology. Somewhere, new latest features
is introduce
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 in cars .
However
, it has impacted
in
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every person's
life
 in two ways either negative or positive.
Also
, I consider why
this
 happening with fast updating
life style
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lifestyle
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. There are too many positive things which every person should wish to
impliment
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implement
 in
thier
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their
life
.
First
things
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 which
i
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I
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 think that
life saving
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 is
best
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the best
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 positive side. Every person has
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wish
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 to rich on their designation with time to time and safely.
Automatic
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 car has very safe to drive because
it
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they
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 run on software which
intact
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is intact
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 in cars.
For example
, speed
manage
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is not in our
hand
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. It become
manage
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 by technology.
Therefore
,
Accident
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 problem should mostly
reduced
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 by
this
.
Secondly
, it
become
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becomes
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 environment friendly
also
.
Forethat
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For that
, pollution can not
popout
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 at atmosphere because it
run
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 through electricity.
Last
 but not least, it is one type of investment because it
run
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 on
road
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 without any need
of
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 services. On the other side, we can not neglect
negative
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 side
also
.
First
,
Market
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the Market
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 value should be dramatically reduced because automatic cars
made
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are made
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 by some companies like Tata and Honda.
Therefore
, other companies market values
goes
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go
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 down.
Secondly
,
people
has
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have
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 become feel laziness.
People
 just sit
on
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in
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driver
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the driver
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 seat and maintain staring so it feels bore.
On
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 conclusion, technology has
most
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the most
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 valuable things
now a days
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nowadays
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. It should be very beneficial and
non beneficial
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non-beneficial
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also
. It depends on
people
 that how they use it but as our countries
is
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are
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 developing
everyday
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 so
people
 change their mindset
also
.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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