chools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Computers
are becoming an essential part of education
. Every student in schools and universities use computer for learning a new information
, search answers at their questions about topic
that they do not really understand and just do homework online in text editor like MC Word. Next,
I will say about advantages and disadvantages about computers
like part of education
.
So, let’s get started with advantages. Like I’m saying earlier, every student use computer for the information
that they interested in. Internet has most of all information
that you need, rarely you can’t
find the desired information
. Also
, it is very convenient for study subjects. For example
: you are a school student and you don’t
understand topic
in math. Your teacher tries to explain you this
topic
, but you again don’t
understand. Teacher explains very hard for you, so at home you decide to watch videos about this
topic
, which explain other teacher with easier words and easier examples. Only then
you understood topic
. It is cool, isn’t it? You also
can prepare for exams with online teachers
, that will greatly facilitate the work. And you don’t
need to go somewhere, because you study online! Computers
in education
is very convenient.
But every thing has disadvantages. First,
students
can write the answers and don’t
try to understand why person answered like that. Thoughtlessly write off. Many of students
think: “Why I need to teach these topics or subjects, if I can just search information
on the internet? It is easier and I do not need to remember a lot of unnecessary information
” and this
thought is not right. You need to learn subjects, because they improve your memory, logic, mental abilities and you just become erudite. Your knowledge should not end with just one thing, you don’t
really know when your knowledge about “unnecessary” subject or topic
will be needed. What if it decides something, for example
will people accept you or not? Will you save a person’s life or not? So, you don’t
need just chose, what topic
is necessary for you and what unnecessary. Especially at university. Most of knowledge there will be useful in the future. You are not just learning it for fun, teachers
are not teaching you these topics for fun, right?
In my opinion, education
should not exclude computers
and the internet in general. It gives so many useful information
, so many clear examples and explaining, which teachers
not always can give students
. Study online is very convenient not only for students
, but and for teachers
, because you don’t
need to wake up very early, you can’t
forget something, because this
thing near to you and you have comfort conditions. Of course, then
some people will be lazy and do nothing, but later they can’t
to pass exams and don’t
know anything. They decide to be like they are and we can not do something for solve this
problem. Some people don’t
have motivation whatever you tried. It is sad, but you can’t
do anything with it. So, as for me, computers
in education
are very important, just because they make many things easier, starting with small answers and ending with sources to your big works for university.Submitted by dulskywork on
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