chools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Introduction & Conclusion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, which are essential for establishing context and summarizing your position on the topic. Consider adding an opening paragraph that introduces the topic and a closing paragraph that reinforces your viewpoint.
Task Response
Your position on the prompt is not clear throughout the essay. To improve, directly answer the question and maintain a consistent line of argument. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and relates back to the original prompt.
Logical Structure
Work on improving the overall logical structure by organizing your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a specific main point that is developed and supported by specific examples or arguments.
Coherence
Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. Avoid abrupt transitions by employing linking words and phrases that will guide the reader through your ideas.
Supporting Examples
Support your main points with clear and relevant examples or explanations. Providing specific examples will strengthen your argument and demonstrate a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite