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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #person #opportunity
Being rich
is become
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increasingly
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 more important thing for a person's life. Lots of
people
 think that having outrageous amounts of money will help both their lives and
people
 who are suffering from being poverty-stricken. For these
people
, when they allocate
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to other
humans
, they will do the most crucial thing with their income. I agree with the idea that if ones have an
execcesive
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excessive
 amounts of money, they should make poorer
people
 utilize it so that they can live under good circumstances and they can
also
 make payment to the students in order to send them a school.
First
 of all, poverty is still a prevalent problem for countries. The governments live
problematic
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 situations to help them and they can't reach everyone. At
this
point
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humans
 living in welfare should offer benefits to them. They can establish non-governmental places and force their rich environments to invest or by hiring
staffs
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 they can
also
 decrease
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unemployment
unemployement
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the unemployement
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 level.
For instance
, 2 years ago I worked as a volunteer in one of these places and all I was doing was giving out soup. The owner of
this
 little place was a
business man
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businessman
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 and
instead
 of spending his money to purchase luxury tools he allocated it to poor
humans
.
On the other hand
, due to the rich
persons
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person
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 scholarships,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 can utilize from that. As a student, I would have lived plenty of difficulties, if I didn't take
scholarship
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the scholarship
a scholarship
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. By giving one
a
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 opportunity to study you can increase their motivation and show them there is a chance to graduate. In
countrysides
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the countrysides
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 of
Turkey
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 children go to school under bad conditions and enrolling
a
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on a
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high school or a university is a luxury.
Therefore
, due to the payments of richer ones they can improve themselves. In light of the facts recounted above, having outrageous life quality enable rich
humans
 to help others
such
 as poor families or students. Picking out
this
 opportunity they improve one's life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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