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Band 2.5

send an email to Jason Briggs, the local chief of police, inviting him to the school to give a talk

Hello, Mr. Jason Briggs. I wish to invite you to our
school
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tell
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talk
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 about
crime
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 and
safety
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 at
school
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,
our
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 students. The national emphasis on
crime
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 and
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safety
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the safety
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 of
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school
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schools
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 continues to be paramount. Over the past year,
overall
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 levels of
crime
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 in
school
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are
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have been
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 decreasing and students
look
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 safer at
school
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 than in the
last
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 few years
old
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. Yet,
violence
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 and theft still appeal to
school
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 experience many students and
challenging
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 parents, teachers, and
school
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 officials. Development of programs to prevent and tackle
violence
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 and
crime
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 in schools. The
violence
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 of
school
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.
This
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 edition contains the latest available
data
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 on
school
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 offense and
safety
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 drawn from a number
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of
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Statistical series supported by the federal government. These
data
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 include results of a study of deaths in
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Schools
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School
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 sponsored by the Ministry of Education and Centers for Diseases Control and Prevention The Justice Statistics Bureau and the National Center for Education continue to work for
provision
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the provision
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 of insurance more timely and complete
data
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 on the issue of
school
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-related
violence
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 and
safety
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. Not only
this
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 report is available to The Internet in its entirety, but individual indicators are updated
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throughout the year as new
data
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 are available. Schools are planned for the edition of the next year of the indicators. Thank you very much, Mr. Jason Briggs! From Ivelina Stoeva 11A class.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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