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send an email to Jason Briggs, the local chief of police, inviting him to the school to give a talk

#email #jason #briggs #police #school #talk
Hello, Mr. Jason Briggs. I wish to invite you to our
school
 to
tell
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 about
crime
 and
safety
 at
school
,
our
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 students. The national emphasis on
crime
 and
safety
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the safety
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 of
school
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schools
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 continues to be paramount. Over the past year,
overall
 levels of
crime
 in
school
are
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have been
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 decreasing and students
look
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have looked
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 safer at
school
 than in the
last
 few years
old
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apply
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. Yet,
violence
 and theft still appeal to
school
 experience many students and
challenging
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 parents, teachers, and
school
 officials. Development of programs to prevent and tackle
violence
 and
crime
 in schools. The
violence
 of
school
.
This
 edition contains the latest available
data
 on
school
 offense and
safety
 drawn from a number
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Statistical series supported by the federal government. These
data
 include results of a study of deaths in
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Schools
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School
 sponsored by the Ministry of Education and Centers for Diseases Control and Prevention The Justice Statistics Bureau and the National Center for Education continue to work for
provision
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the provision
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 of insurance more timely and complete
data
 on the issue of
school
-related
violence
 and
safety
. Not only
this
 report is available to The Internet in its entirety, but individual indicators are updated
there
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throughout the year as new
data
 are available. Schools are planned for the edition of the next year of the indicators. Thank you very much, Mr. Jason Briggs! From Ivelina Stoeva 11A class.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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