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Children should never be educated by parents at home

#children #parents #home
The number of children who
educated
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are educated
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from
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by
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 their parents isn’t much. More parents don’t have the opportunity to spend their whole days educating their children, so they
enroll
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them in
school
. A lot of people think going to
school
 is right as I do.
To begin
 with, when a
child
is educate
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 by his mother or father, he loses his teaching qualification.
Such
 as a qualified teacher knows much more than a parent who graduated 10 years ago. So it becomes clearer to us that the
child
 will be more educated.
Secondly
, by going to
school
, the
child
 will meet many new people and they become friends.
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, the
child
 will become more communicative and confident.
Also
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 a change of location leads to diversity.
For instance
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,
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sitting at home staring at a
child
. In conclusion, studying at home with our parents may do us more harm than good. Children must attend
school
.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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