In many cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is lack of a sense of community.* *What are the causes of this problem?* *How can it be solved?

in recent decades,some communities have no intention to
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with their neighbours .it shows that these days
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their sentiment of relationships in society.it can be considered
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of causes for
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we can find some solution as well. I will explain here. it is true that peoples lifestyles have been changing nowadays.individuals lives are filled with work and their own issues so they have no time to build an
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relationship with their neighbourhoods.they prefer to find some solutions for their obstacles which some of them need
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to solve
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as heartbreaking or poverty and that overthinking makes them aggressive and
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.
therefore
, it has
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and their relationships.
in addition
,technology makes
people
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social media and playing online games which is
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their social
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relationships
.so,
people
s intention to build their own sense of community
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decreases
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these days
on the other hand
,we can find some solution for that problem.
firstly
, it is necessary to teach
people
about the use of community
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relationships
.social media has a major effect on peoples
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so,
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folks
can read about the advantages of that relationships.
secondly
the sense of
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in
people
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television as well. in conclusion, the sense of community is
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increasing
in some societies while that sentiment has a direct
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on peoples
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.working a lot and spending lots of time in
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social
media can be recognized as its
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causes
courses
so, educating
people
can be the best solution for that matter.
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