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Humans are basically selfish. Write an essay about 300 words to state that whether you agree or disagree. Provide examples and illustrations to support your viewpoint.

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The whole people bussy own business and job they do not understand each other because they only look self .individuals not look around about public. I totally agree humans are selfish in present. Many way folks are basically selfish because the community does not prefer to everyone they
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 bussy to task and not help for each other.they themselves safe in future because
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 dates any employees not trust anyone.every day folks are trying to need more cash and they do not look around living areas.For ,example some employees industry in the same company and they try to more secure performance and
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increase the number of permission and they do not help others while he working in same owners they only convince
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, gentlemen show up to others and they more importance to self .employees running to esteem about every field and they full time try to cut folk.Humans only think about family and relatives they do not think about others.society important to make more money I think it's bad for selfish because they only prefer to make everything. In my ,conclusion whole people should be helpful for society because it is important to everyone while it is safe for the future.
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