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Having a good university degree guarantees people a good job To what extent do you agree?

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Studying at the best universities mostly leads individuals to
work
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 companies. People who graduate from highly ranked universities mostly get higher positions immediately whenever they start their
career
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. I think that
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 the
immensive
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immersive
immense
 school
degree
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, the personality of the student
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 plays
such
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 an important role in
this
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.
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Work life
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 and University experience are bluntly bonded to each other. Students who manage to get into the top colleges,
they
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apply
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prove themselves to firms that they have a schedule
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 disciplined and well planned. Getting into top colleges requires constant study and a
well prepared
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work
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 programme.
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, a perfect diploma
degree
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 will make an impact on
work
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 owners that these diploma owners are intelligent. To get a good faculty
degree
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 people
have
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 to be smart as well. Head hunters of companies are always in search of intelligent, hardworking individuals with high bachelor's degrees. Companies mostly make these people start from the top
such
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 as; being a manager, a principal or an administrator.
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, for
firms
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 it is not enough to have a
well completed
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 college life. They
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 require their workers to be compatible with the
work
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 environment and their coworkers as well.
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Moreover
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 they ask for their workers to be in control of their emotions and know how to communicate in case of an argument or a problematic situation. In conclusion, a bachelor's
degree
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 with excellent marks will play a big role in which
title
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 person will start their career. Being in control of your emotions and yourself will
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 be a need, to get accepted to higher positions.
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