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The detailed description about crime will affect the people and cause many social problems. Some people say that the media should be strictly controlled. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that
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in-depth
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explanation
 about criminal activities can cause
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disturbance
disturbances
 among the
people
 leading to many issues at society level. It is considered by some that publishing must be monitored. I completely agree with the given statement and there are two reasons why I think so and they will be explained in the
next
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To begin
 with,
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 activities promote fear and
unstability
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instability
 in
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society. It is a well-known fact that any mishappening in
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society scare
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individuals
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 children and women not only in the urban areas but
also
 in the rural localities.
Although
such
 incidence occur rarely and
people
 take precautionary
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measures
measure
 to combat
such
 happenings. To
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illustrate
, firing in
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public places during broad
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daylight
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day light
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 mentally disturbs
people
af
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of
 all ages for a long period of time.
Therefore
,
such
 negative and
life threatening
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 events have a detrimental effect on
people
's life.
Secondly
, Violent activities
disturbs
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 communal harmony in the region. It is a proven fact that during homicides and genocides negative thoughts and wrong
perception
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 establish in the communities leading to frustration and misunderstandings in the individuals especially in the developed economies. Hatred
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prevails
 over peace and brotherhood for a while.
For instance
, Black
people
 in Australia
are often attacked
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 due to discrimination and
as a
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 many Asian countries have
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perception
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 towards Australian citizens and
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 leads to more hatred towards white
people
 . In short, societies starts discrimination against each other. In conclusion, I
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 affirm that newspaper
agecies
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agencies
 and media have an imperative role to play by showing minimum content of the crime and the authorities must put a check and balance system in place to regulate these authorities .
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