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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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In school, some students study harder and devote more energy than others; it is the same with individuals in the workplace. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reason and analyze whether it is always beneficial for average
people
. In some
people
’s opinion, those
people
’s behaviour is rather difficult to imagine or understand, even with the idea that they are stupid.
However
, compared with temporary happiness gained from watching TV or playing games, these students and workers pursue a sense of fulfilment, because they enjoy the process of concentrating on their
work
, dedicating to it and achieving something.
Besides
, the exterior temptation is another reason.
For example
, some children study hard before a final exam, just because they long for the awards,
such
 as pocket money or a long-expected toy, provided by their parents. Just as I mentioned above, it is a good thing, as individuals could gain mental or material enjoyment by diligent
work
.
On the other hand
,
this
 is not always a good thing, since sometimes there are other more important and pressing matters.
For instance
,
people
 who are not in good condition should prioritize their own body
health
, which is the basis for their later
work
 and life. If they, ignoring their
health
, just pay attention to
work
 or study, their
health
 in fact are ruined.
Thus
, working hard is not always a good thing and
people
 should
work
 according to specific conditions. In conclusion,
people
work
 hard for internal and external reasons, in chase of inner peace or outer materials
for instance
.
However
, it is not always a good thing if they
work
 too hard to neglect particular cases, jeopardizing their
health
 sometimes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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