Nowadays young people want more freeedom and they pay little or no attention towards the older people's advice. Agree or Disagree.

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about new technology and young

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their own.

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instead

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them stronger and clever.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Nowadays young people want more freeedom and they pay little or no attention towards the older people's advice. Agree or Disagree.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that if an individual behaves in an anti-social manner, such as committing a crime, then society is to blame. What are the causes of anti-social behavior? Who do you think is responsible?*

Task 1 You have seen an advertisement for part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: -describe your experience -tell him why you are interested in the job -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their families and friends. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, traditional dress and costumes are considered effective ways of maintaining links with the past. How effective can traditional costumes be, in this sense? What other ways exist to help citizens connect with a country’s past?

Today, many people use the internet and smartphones to transfer money to friends, family, and businesses. Do you think it is a negative or positive development?