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Nowadays, sports is a big business with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and other ways. Is this a positive or negative development for sports? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, the
sport
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 has become one of the largest businesses where professional athletes and companies involved earn a significant amount of money every day. In
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 essay, I will examine why does it ruin the spirit of
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 and explain why
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 trend will continue to deteriorate the overall situation. Previously, sports competitions were designed to provide
people
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 with an opportunity to challenge themselves. Indeed, a considerable number of
people
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 was viewing
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 games as football, cricket, or hockey as a perfect option for their spare time spending.
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, the situation has changed over the past two decades when more companies decided to invest in
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.
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, if in 2002 a transfer of a good football player cost 15 million euros,
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 number more than tripled in 2021.
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 tendency shows that private enterprises are interested in players who are able to provide them with high income, and
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 why an abundance of
people
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 is calling upon their beloved sporting clubs to follow the traditions, not the will of businessmen. The influence of private companies,
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, is not going to be limited by fans and clubs. Indeed, we have already witnessed several times why the
sport
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 will not be respected by
people
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 in the future as it used to be. The transfer of Neymar from Barcelona to PSG,
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, has destroyed the faith of millions across the globe since the owner of Paris` club paid 222 million euros for the deal. Sadly, but it has already become a reality in which
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 principles as fair play and transparency are not respected by players and businessmen. Rather than making
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 a part of a big business, owners of clubs should be interested in preserving the values of their ancestors. In conclusion, I would like to say that despite all of these factors sports competitions would be loved by the majority of the population.
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, the
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 decade could become the period
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 going to fully destroy the spirit of
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, and it would be fully transformed into an activity
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 only aimed to make money for private enterprises.
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