Should students be allowed to choose which classes they take, or should they be required to take the same classes as everyone else? What are the advantages and disadvantages of each approach to education?

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regarding which courses to be done for a better future is the crucial one. Many think that students should have the liberty of choosing the course on their own while some believe that they should be taking
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classes similar to their peers. Both
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aspects have some benefits and drawbacks which are discussed in detail in the ensuing paragraphs.
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, students would choose the classes that
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them the most and
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would give them the opportunity to prosper and have a
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in the area of their
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will
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make them independent
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and responsible towards life. They will think about their
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more seriously. The survey of 2017 indicated that many teenagers in
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developed countries, who are allowed to choose their area of
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on their own, have shown to have successful careers.
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are sometimes taken in the influence of celebrities that feature on television. And
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could cost them wasting a lot of time and money
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something that they are not quite interested in.
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, courses that are generally opted by masses, have given promising careers to many in the past. Henceforth, a rat race begins after one or two
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success stories where people succeeded in life by taking certain classes. But
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would cause students to learn things that do not
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them at all. Just because something has offered
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career
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to a few people, does not mean that it would be fruitful to everyone else as well.
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matters a lot when it comes to making
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choices.
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could cause people to feel lost and depressed after some time. In conclusion, independent
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about which course to be taken can be rewarding if they are not influenced
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. Whereas choosing what others choose to do could be fruitful if well thought
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